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24/8/16       Kiwi can recount

On Mooonday My Inquiry group with the awesome teacher the one and only … MR BREACH…    we went to kiwican to have Fun. We played chuck the cow but the Cow was supposed to be a chicken and it made pig noises. I got to throw the chicken once but I didn’t win when I ran around the circle I kept slipping over because my socks were to slippery and they were new . When I was fielding I caught the first throw. I felt really good because my team could get into line faster.

And when we chuck the chicken/cow Nathan has to yell out CHUCK THE CHICKEN!!!!!

And the person that's holding the Chicken That person has to throw It. When Katie and Nathan says the games that you are going to play and you’ve played that game before and you love it you get really excited but when they say the games that you haven’t heard before you look at them and make funny faces but when you play It you really want to play it again. I love going to Kiwi Can It’s so fun when you go there. When you go to kiwi can you want to go again It’s that fun you could stay there for hours. When the fielding team are fielding they are like Rugby players and and league players

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My Game BTAP

This year two new sports are being added to the Paralympic Games. They are canoeing and triathlon. In the triathlon the athletes must swim 750 metres, cycle for 20 kilometres, and then run for 5 kilometres. Paralympic athletes may also compete in other sports including archery, boccia, football, judo, powerlifting, rowing, sailing, swimming, sitting volleyball, track cycling, wheelchair basketball, wheelchair fencing, wheelchair rugby, and wheelchair tennis. To learn more about all of the Paralympic sports, please visit the 2016 Paralympic Games website.

I made a game up called BTAP . BTAP is like 'touch' but you can pass it forward and kick.

The creators of BTAP were Levi and my best friend Tai. Me and Tai were really happy because the juniors and middles kept asking to play.