The sea being your friend
This girl named Jane
she looked out her window frame
all she saw was rain
when she got to the beach
she had a little speech
when she got home
she had a ice cream cone
that’s the end of my story
I hope it was glory.
well done levi i like your rap see you later
ReplyDeleteHi Levi it's Jasmine I really like your rhyme. I like the part “that’s the end of my story I hope it was glory” I also like how you rhymed it with the line after not the last line with the first line. Maybe next time you could write what you were learning.
ReplyDeleteHi Levi that is an amazing rap/poem I think that something else that you could add would be to add photos next to the words like were it says “Ice cream cone” you could add a photo of an “ Ice cream cone “ what I liked about your rap is that you have made mostly all all of your words rhyme and something else that you could would be make each sentence be in the same line so that it’s not so spread of .
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